Your over all poem is very good, you gave it a twist, and I love it.
You made this poem stand out, and made it your own, I loved how you really reached out tho the reader, good job.
Your a good writer and you know how to keep your poem flowing.
The over all set up of this poem caught my eye, and made me want to read it. The more interesting and eye catching you make your work, shows you know what your doing. I want to wish you the best of luck at writing, you have true talent.